10/24/09 – Guest Poet: Trillium
Guest Poet: Trillium
From her teen angst collection
Ghostly Life
floating around,
lost in time,
forgotten by all that live on.
lost in the dust of times long past,
unknown to all,
forgotten except when something goes wrong.
never there,
always standing by,
this will forever be my own fate.
left alone to fight my tears
time will never change my emotions.
left alone in a world all my own,
where I am never heard.
always silent,
always here yet never there.
staying in the same old place,
forced to be here while the world forgets,
no one hears my calls or pleads,
time will never set me free
imprisoning me forever more.
searching for someone who understands,
never shall I find such a person,
for I am left here to face eternity alone.
a slave to my past life’s feelings,
I shall be trapped for I’ve lost the key.
I gave it to those I left behind.
they threw it away once they forgot,
even though they tried not.
I became a slave to eternity.
Lonely
lonely from the many nights I’ve spent alone,
wishing for the affection I need so.
single I shall stay,
until I find the one.
gotta find him soon,
before I go mad.
from seeing him,
only in my dreams and wishes.
forever it seems,
him so close,
and yet so far.
an inch in my dreams,
forever in life.
it seems I will never have him,
and so I wish with all my hopes and dreams,
that he will find a way to me,
before my time is gone…
October 24th, 2009 at 10:43 pm
very talented, I am impressed
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October 25th, 2009 at 7:21 am
Trillium–nice work. Expresses well that miserable place most of us have visited. Hope you’ve left it behind.
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October 25th, 2009 at 9:58 am
Trillium — Your poems take me back, help me to revisit and rethink some feelings of long ago and to remember that, like yours, mine were valid and very real. That’s what poems should help us to do. Good work!
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October 25th, 2009 at 11:46 am
well-expressed, Trillium. That sense of being trapped in time does, thank god, go away. I had forgotten just how immobile you can feel, how hard it is to get outside yourself.
good work
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October 25th, 2009 at 1:45 pm
Trillium – You have a vital voice and a beautiful tune! Singout!
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October 25th, 2009 at 10:27 pm
Great work, Trillium. Captures that difficult time of life to which none of us wish to return. Promising talent!
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October 31st, 2009 at 4:11 am
Short but varying line lengths give the impression of sharp uncontrolled thoughts interspersed with some sad, longer reflections. So, overall it sets the scene for the internal lament of loneliness.
Nice work. Drew an accurate picture of where you were at. Hope the therapeutic effect of writing helped you to leave it behind, though.
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November 8th, 2009 at 1:20 am
I have a fair share of that place or should I call it phase, when I even hated myself, created a wall that no one can see through and like a prisoner I only talk to shadows.
Keep on writing Trillium, maybe you will even surpass your Mom’s writing skills, excuse me ma’am Pat.
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